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There is so much to love about this story already!! :flirtysmile:

Okay first - I love the whole story with Tim and Delilah and how everyone got involved with it. Tony's remarks/advice was hilarious, as was Gibbs adding 'help' here and there. But of course Ellie knows what's up!

And the idea of Tony and Tim shopping at Victoria's Secret? Together? :lol2: I want to see that happen so bad.

I like the drama and suspense so far, and the unique circumstances that brought them there. My favorite moment so far was when Gibbs tracks down Tony and mentions the plague (that was a nice touch), and all Tony can say is "help him" and point at the burning house.

Can't wait for more!

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"Where were you three marriages ago?"

:rofl:

Tony definitely has a disease. Foot in mouth disease :rolleyes: :rofl: blessed idiot.
Oh my, yes, please let McNozzo in Victoria's Secret happen? pleeeeease? :flirtysmile: even if it's a one shot followup, if it doesn't fit this story, a little comedy sequel... ;D
Tony with the little boy on the roof awwwww bless him :smitten: smoke inhalation has to hurt like hell on plague damaged lungs.

Well Sheila, you do have a talent for taking a beautiful sunny day and getting us 3/4 of the way towards tragedy :lol2: Seriously, great start, can't wait to read more!

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There is so much to love about this story already!! :flirtysmile:

Okay first - I love the whole story with Tim and Delilah and how everyone got involved with it. Tony's remarks/advice was hilarious, as was Gibbs adding 'help' here and there. But of course Ellie knows what's up!

And the idea of Tony and Tim shopping at Victoria's Secret? Together? :lol2: I want to see that happen so bad.

I like the drama and suspense so far, and the unique circumstances that brought them there. My favorite moment so far was when Gibbs tracks down Tony and mentions the plague (that was a nice touch), and all Tony can say is "help him" and point at the burning house.

Can't wait for more!


Thanks Kelly! I am so glad you like it. It is angst personified. :jumpgreen: :jumpgreen: :jumpgreen:

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"Where were you three marriages ago?"

:rofl:

Tony definitely has a disease. Foot in mouth disease :rolleyes: :rofl: blessed idiot.
Oh my, yes, please let McNozzo in Victoria's Secret happen? pleeeeease? :flirtysmile: even if it's a one shot followup, if it doesn't fit this story, a little comedy sequel... ;D
Tony with the little boy on the roof awwwww bless him :smitten: smoke inhalation has to hurt like hell on plague damaged lungs.

Well Sheila, you do have a talent for taking a beautiful sunny day and getting us 3/4 of the way towards tragedy :lol2: Seriously, great start, can't wait to read more!


Thanks Sarah! I will consider the Victoria Secret idea. Something is brewing, but there is lots of sadness first. You are so kind to read. :kisscheek:

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You write Tim/Tony friendship so well. I could just picture that conversation, and I loved Ellie's role in the whole thing ;D

Poor Tony, and poor Tim. They've got a long way to go for recovery from all this.

Someone needs to smack that neighbor. :ranting:

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Oh my word, Lia, that smilie is amazing :smitten: :rofl: :smitten: and I totally agree :madhop: stupid neighbour :banghead: >:-(

“I mean Jethro isn’t the friendliest face, but he represents security.”

I genuinely laughed aloud at that!

Awwwwww sad :'( you do do McNozzo friendship so beautifully, Sheila.

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You write Tim/Tony friendship so well. I could just picture that conversation, and I loved Ellie's role in the whole thing ;D

Poor Tony, and poor Tim. They've got a long way to go for recovery from all this.

Someone needs to smack that neighbor. :ranting:


Thanks for the kind words, Lia. I will get to reading yours soon. I am immersed on trying to finish this one. If it happens, it will be close.

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Oh my word, Lia, that smilie is amazing :smitten: :rofl: :smitten: and I totally agree :madhop: stupid neighbour :banghead: >:-(

“I mean Jethro isn’t the friendliest face, but he represents security.”

I genuinely laughed aloud at that!

Awwwwww sad :'( you do do McNozzo friendship so beautifully, Sheila.


Thanks so much, Sara. Let me get a few more chapters written and I can start reading stories.

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Just keep going, Sheila! You can do it :typing: :whip: ;)

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This is fabulous so far, as I expected. You really are a master at this.

Maybe it's because I've spent so much time in the ICU waiting room the past several months, but the hug between Tony and Delilah when Tim was intubated moved me to tears. It was so real and so raw. I could see that whole thing playing out exactly that way, from the girls sleeping in chairs to Tony wanting to take the baby and Gibbs stopping him. Just perfect.

I need to reread, but there were two women interacting with the guys at the scene, and I had a different impression the first time through than what they seem to think. I don't want to voice too much until I go back and see if my theory makes sense, or if I misread something.

Amazing story. Can't wait for more!

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I swore I wasn't going to read (except Sarah's story for me) until I was done writing, but I knew from the title which prompt you'd picked and I couldn't resist. Agreed with what everbody has said about the bullpen banter and those great lines. :) I love the way you've set everything up, and I can't help thinking there's more to the neighbor than meets the eye. I can't wait to see where this goes next, even though I'm sure it will be angsty. :-/

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Sorry, got behind on reading. :)

Chapter two...

The way things were going, I'm not surprised that the little one died, though I hate to imagine that. Makes me want to hug mine a little tighter tonight. Yes, McGee will take it hard. :( And of course someone filmed it all.

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"Gibbs? I mean Jethro isn’t the friendliest face, but he represents security.”
:lol2:

I'm not going to say that I love the idea of McGee having any brain damage, but your story is much more realistic that way - that he woke up, is having problems, and isn't just magically better. And I like it that way. It feels much more authentic. Plus gets some great hurt/comfort going for the gang, which I adore!!

I am loving the McNozzo friendship going on.

On to chapter three!

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LOVE this. And I also love Vance giving fashion advice.

I love the conflict you are weaving into the story with the mom's account of what happened. And with McGee not able to remember, well... it should be interesting. Again I have to express more love for the friendship you are highlighting, with Tony's faith in McGee's heroics.

...And team Gibbs is on the case! Woot!

This totally has a Gone Girl vibe, with the press falling in love with a complete lie. I am really loving this story!! :smitten:

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Also can't help thinking McGee would be easy to convince he was a little cowardly, and less easy to convince he did everything right. He's not exactly brimming with selfconfidence, and with his memory shot... :-/ :hug2col: poor McGee.

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Also can't help thinking McGee would be easy to convince he was a little cowardly, and less easy to convince he did everything right. He's not exactly brimming with selfconfidence, and with his memory shot... :-/ :hug2col: poor McGee.

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Another great chapter!

I'm glad he's starting to regain his memory. They are going to need it to unravel the truth. :yes: :hug2col:

Trust Tony not to take care of himself properly. :gibbssmack:

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Hey Sheila! :jumpgreen: I've been following your story, and I LOVE IT. Not able to properly analyze and dissect it yet. But oh yes I will. ;D ;D

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I am still trying to get it all done in time. Will thank each and everyone of you later. And I will read all of your stories. Sorry and thanks. :kisscheek: :kisscheek: :kisscheek:

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Slowly working my way through these stories ;D Loving this one already! I love Tony's protectiveness of Tim (everyone's, actually, but especially Tony) and this Paige Martin sounds like a piece of work :P I was suspicious when she told Tim that it was no use and the kids were already dead.

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You've still got an amazing story going on Sheila. I'm really, really loving it. I was worried about the confrontation between the dad and McGee, but it turned out different than I was expecting, which was a good thing. I liked Gibbs putting doubt into his head, because yeah... probably not the first time mom went off the deep end or twisted the truth. McGee's struggles there were painful to read, but I love that even through his difficulties, he wanted to help the guy find his girl.

To be honest, I didn't watch many episodes of NCIS late in the season this year, so I don't know much about Tony's girlfriend. But she seems awesome. :) I like that she tag-teamed up with Gibbs there.

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“We established that on the phone when he didn’t let you know what happened. Believe me, if I didn’t accept the fact I was part daycare provider, I would’ve bounced him years ago.”
:lol2: :lol2: :lol2:

I confess I also laughed at "be there in a minute, Zoe's naked!" Like, Tony, dude, you could've just asked him to wait I'm pretty sure :rofl:

"Let me know if you need backup."

I think Gibbs is rethinking the part time bit of his daycare provider job description :rolleyes: :rofl:

Tim remembering the little girl as Maggots is equal parts hilarious and heartbreaking. I couldn't help but laugh, but also OUCH.

I can see pieces coming together. I feel like they're going to solve the case, but it's not going to bring the little girl back, and the truth ain't gonna be pretty.

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“Sorry, Elliot, but you belong to me now.”

That was very Gibbs of you, Ellie! :clap:

Okay, not gonna lie, kinda love Gibbs gettin' all hardass in interrogation :blush: ;D and in a different way, kind of love that he's getting all "high pitched" about the nebuliser.

Paige really is a piece of work :madhop: :banghead: >:-( Poor Maggie. And I'm not surprised her paramour puked when he realised he'd had a hand in encouraging her to murder her kid - horrific. :gibbssmack: to him. Well may he feel guilty but he really should've thought twice before giving that excuse to a clearly unstable woman.

Okay Tim, I'm really not certain that you slipping off on your own is the best idea you've ever had... :th_uhoh2:

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Still gripping. Trust Tim to slip out when no one's looking. He's as bad as Tony.

Loved the bit with Ellie and Elliot.

Can't wait for more! :madhop: :madhop: :madhop:

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:gibbssmack: Come on, McGee! You know better than to just leave like that! This woman is a real piece of work :P Granted, Elliot and Miller aren't much better. Still, I can't wait for them to nail her.

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Oh my goodness, I know Paige Martin is fictional but I want to reach through the screen and slap her silly. Bad enough she's making Tim feel bad and doubt himself, but to do that to her son I just... that's evil.
Such a sweet Tim/Tony moment :'( :smitten:

"When you remember everything, you work to forget. When you forget, you work to remember. You know McGee. Finding memories was just another problem to solve. He couldn’t let go until they were in place.”

Hah, so much truth.

"Glue a tassel to your penis and tell me how it feels."

:lol2: :lol2: :lol2: :lol2: :lol2: :lol2: :lol2: :lol2: :lol2:

This was such a great story, Sheila, beautifully done!

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Just finished up. I love the ending. Glad they caught Paige, although I thought they may have had enough already. Her trying to get the kid to confess really takes the cake. I wanna throttle that lady!

I'm just shaking my head at Tony's taste in lingerie. Maybe he'll learn a thing or two.

Great story! :yes:

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Just finished up. I love the ending. Glad they caught Paige, although I thought they may have had enough already. Her trying to get the kid to confess really takes the cake. I wanna throttle that lady!

I'm just shaking my head at Tony's taste in lingerie. Maybe he'll learn a thing or two.

Great story! :yes:


Barb, we need to talk about the Nepal story I owe you. Thanks so much for reading

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“Sorry, Elliot, but you belong to me now.”

That was very Gibbs of you, Ellie! :clap:

Okay, not gonna lie, kinda love Gibbs gettin' all hardass in interrogation :blush: ;D and in a different way, kind of love that he's getting all "high pitched" about the nebuliser.

Paige really is a piece of work :madhop: :banghead: >:-( Poor Maggie. And I'm not surprised her paramour puked when he realised he'd had a hand in encouraging her to murder her kid - horrific. :gibbssmack: to him. Well may he feel guilty but he really should've thought twice before giving that excuse to a clearly unstable woman.

Okay Tim, I'm really not certain that you slipping off on your own is the best idea you've ever had... :th_uhoh2:


Sarah, you are the greatest for following and appreciating this story as you have. I have loved every word you've written to me. :kisscheek: :kisscheek: :kisscheek:

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:gibbssmack: Come on, McGee! You know better than to just leave like that! This woman is a real piece of work :P Granted, Elliot and Miller aren't much better. Still, I can't wait for them to nail her.


Colleen, thanks so much for reading this story. You are always there with support and appreciation. :kisscheek: :kisscheek: :kisscheek:

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You've still got an amazing story going on Sheila. I'm really, really loving it. I was worried about the confrontation between the dad and McGee, but it turned out different than I was expecting, which was a good thing. I liked Gibbs putting doubt into his head, because yeah... probably not the first time mom went off the deep end or twisted the truth. McGee's struggles there were painful to read, but I love that even through his difficulties, he wanted to help the guy find his girl.

To be honest, I didn't watch many episodes of NCIS late in the season this year, so I don't know much about Tony's girlfriend. But she seems awesome. :) I like that she tag-teamed up with Gibbs there.


Kelly, this is all for you! I appreciate you as a writer, and I am soooo glad I had your name for WEE. Let's collaborate again on something.

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Yeah. I've had my head in WEE for the past bit, so I'm ready to start looking at that. :yes:

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Nepal is probably next on all of our priority lists, I know it's on mine! :th_uhoh2:

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So glad they got her >:-( Horrible to try and pin it on her own son! And it came full-circle with Victoria Secret in the end! I felt so bad for Tim throughout the whole thing, though. To blame himself for something he didn't even do.

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I just read the chapter with the press conference and wow great dialogue there, with Tony trying to argue but Vance and Gibbs telling him no. And I also read the part when Tony first visited McGee in the ICU or whatever, and all of the interactions were really touching. You're so good at this, Sheila.

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Got behind in reading again. But after a day of baking in the sun (and getting a nice sunburn to boot), I'm ready to settle in the air conditioning and finish reading!

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Ellie! Channeling her inner Gibbs. I love how you are using her in the story and a great twist to the story with the affair and everything. You do a great job writing the investigation... it isn't boring to read and you piece out information in a totally believable way. It just makes it a joy to read and very realistic to boot.

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McGee put Maggie’s picture in his wallet, and checked his cash. As usual, his emergency $100 was there. He walked out of his room and slowly walked through the unit. When he got to the stairs, he looked around, saw that no one was watching, and he slipped through the door.

Tim!!! What are you doing? :-/

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Sheila - I won't even mention how THRILLED I was that you picked my set, and this prompt. Okay, maybe I will mention it. I was GIDDY! And this story was amazing and I can't wait to re-read it again. Truly. I loved it so much.

The McNozzo friendship was perfect. Your story had great twists and a wonderfully evil villain. I couldn't believe she tried to pin it on her son. Just... wow.

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I really loved how you ended it - a trip to the mall! So funny and light, and it was needed after the kind of case that you created.

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Sheila - I won't even mention how THRILLED I was that you picked my set, and this prompt. Okay, maybe I will mention it. I was GIDDY! And this story was amazing and I can't wait to re-read it again. Truly. I loved it so much.

The McNozzo friendship was perfect. Your story had great twists and a wonderfully evil villain. I couldn't believe she tried to pin it on her son. Just... wow.

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I really loved how you ended it - a trip to the mall! So funny and light, and it was needed after the kind of case that you created.

:smitten: Thank you, thank you Sheila.


I loved doing it for you!!!! :kisscheek:

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Poor Tim, he almost made the ultimate sacrifice and still found himself being vilified by an evil woman. Her plan to kill one of her children because she had problems, all so that she could enter into a relationship with a new man...totally inhuman.

As ever you get to the heart of the team and what makes them who they are. Tony's unwavering support for Tim and his desire to show the world the truth of what happened in the Martin house was inspirational.

Thank goodness they uncovered the truth both about Tim's heartbreaking rescue attempt and Paige Martin's hateful crime.

Your personal experiences gave the story an even greater sense of realism and propelled us ever deeper into the story - excellent work! :clap:

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You do such a good job of painting a clear picture of the dregs of humanity. I'm sure there really are people like this, so kudos for adding the realism. As always, your team interactions are spot on ;D

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:yes: I think out of a story I really enjoyed overall, my absolute favourite part of it was Tony's unswerving determination not to let McGee get run over by Paige Martin's lies. That was really beautiful.

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Ugh, you're dialogue is always so awesome. Jealous! ;D ;D ;D

There were lots of perfect moments in this, but this one was my favorite (well, second to the entire press conference scene, which was great.):
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Charlie stared at him and shrugged.

Tony gripped his hands. “If there are, I can tell you that now is not one of them.”

The wet, dark eyes stared back at him.

“Maggie is watching and she knows the truth. Don’t disappoint her, Charlie. Please don’t disappoint her.”


Tony being the one to help that kid was a great choice, and rather unexpected in some ways, but it made so much sense. I loved that.

Few words, lots of meaning.

That Paige woman is a piece of work.

Poor confused Tim. Enjoyed how his memories came back in pieces. And Tony hugging him. :nice:

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Great story. Really great. There was nothing to not like about it except for a cold-blooded killer who..gah! I hate what that...that animal did. Doesn't deserve to even be called human. 'Who does that?' indeed!

I loved, loved, loved the banter. So many funny things, was almost like watching an episode, only better, because the story made sense, had a clear-cut beginning, middle and end which the show writers don't always manage.

I think it bears noting that the original characters included, while maybe small roles, were really great too. Though few details about them were given, the scenes you set with them made them 'feel' like people, not just cardboard cut-outs stuck in like some OCs are. I found myself wishing they had a larger part of the story, especially the arson investigator and Charlie. They shone while not taking away from the main characters.

One of the show's writers' bad habits is that when writing an episode is that they sideline one or more characters to focus on other characters but in this one, everyone mattered in an important way or multiple important ways, even Zoe who has been treated like a token girlfriend on the show had an important part to play. The show writers should learn how to do that from you because it made it feel more like a team rather than one episode being "The Gibbs Show" or "The Tony show" or "The McGee Show," so to speak.

The whole VS thing was hilarious from beginning to end! :)

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Phoenix, you made my day!! Thank you. I need to get back in here to read more WEE stories. I have been a lot busier this summer than I had anticipated. Working with youth in a camp right now. Appreciate it sooo much. :kisscheek:

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Great story. Really great. There was nothing to not like about it except for a cold-blooded killer who..gah! I hate what that...that animal did. Doesn't deserve to even be called human. 'Who does that?' indeed!

I loved, loved, loved the banter. So many funny things, was almost like watching an episode, only better, because the story made sense, had a clear-cut beginning, middle and end which the show writers don't always manage.

I think it bears noting that the original characters included, while maybe small roles, were really great too. Though few details about them were given, the scenes you set with them made them 'feel' like people, not just cardboard cut-outs stuck in like some OCs are. I found myself wishing they had a larger part of the story, especially the arson investigator and Charlie. They shone while not taking away from the main characters.

One of the show's writers' bad habits is that when writing an episode is that they sideline one or more characters to focus on other characters but in this one, everyone mattered in an important way or multiple important ways, even Zoe who has been treated like a token girlfriend on the show had an important part to play. The show writers should learn how to do that from you because it made it feel more like a team rather than one episode being "The Gibbs Show" or "The Tony show" or "The McGee Show," so to speak.

The whole VS thing was hilarious from beginning to end! :)

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