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PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:14 am 
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Disclaimer: NCIS is not mine
Rating: FR13
Parings: McGiva
Genres: Drama, Het, Friendship, Suspense
Warnings: None
Summary: “I told you not to look down.”

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:16 am 
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Prologue

Lori:
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Nice beginning. Can't wait to see where it goes from here.


Sherry:
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*dies*

THAT WAS MEAN!

LOL. But I mean that in only the best way. I think your McGee is very nicely done. :) And Ziva, of course. :) I have a hard time writing her not being totally snarky or without emotions, even though she's proven she can be both. :p But I liked how you wrote her in the prologue - she's concerned, then as soon as she realizes he knows that, she returns to this emotionless state. And I don't think McGee was written like Tony in this - I liked the hint of self-doubt you gave him, though I think he's gotten better about it as the seasons have gone on.

Overall, good job! And you better update soon! LOL.


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YAY! Great start. I really liked it. I think you've portrayed the characters well.

Can't wait for more!

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:19 am 
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Chapter One

Teri:
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I don't know what you're so worried about. I think Tim sounds good. You've managed to get his uncertainty as well as his determination set out clearly.

You know, our resident McGiva worshipper (Smack) would probably be willing to beta for you. I don't know how busy she is, but considering McGiva is her OTP, she's probably already squeeing over the story. :)


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Well, I AM squeeing over this already, Teri was right. ;D It's very good. You have both McGee & Ziva's voices down & their interaction is perfect. Fantastic. :)


Lori:
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I think you are doing a great job writing McGee and your story is developing well. Can't wait to read the next chapter.


Barbara:
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*sits and waits for the next chapter*


Barbara:
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Woot! Glad to hear it.

Hurry, Sherry! :P


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Come on! When are we getting more? ;D


Teri:
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Yahoo! I'm so excited!

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:20 am 
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Chapter Two

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Ah! No, that is not what I was expecting! Ah! I'm crouched in front of my computer screen, inches from the monitor because I don't have my contacts in yet and I read this?? Oh, weep. There is more, right? You're not going to leave it like this, right?

Well done, Emy. Very well done.

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:21 am 
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Chapter Three

Barbara:
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OMGosh!!! 2 updates!!!

2 WONDERFUL updates!

I am very glad the last one was up before I read the first one. :o

Excellent job, Emy. Can't wait for more!!!


Barbara:
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I'm sure the epilogue will be the perfect ending. I like your style.


Teri:
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Wow...so sneaky. I'm impressed. I loved that. It was so raw and so real. I really liked it. You should write Tim stories more often. :)

Can't wait for the end!

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:23 am 
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Epilogue

Teri:
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Now, the real question is whether or not Ziva will remember after she's no longer on drugs. :)

Nice sweet little ending.


Barbara:
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Awesome epilogue, Emy! I love drugged-up Ziva. So cute!

Now you need to write the date..


Jems:
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Mutter, mutter, mutter, Oh, mumble, mumble, Dear, Mumble, More, Mutter, mutter, McGiva, mutter, mutter! :P ;D

Well from a purely neutral point of view this was very well written kept us on edge and had a great flow to it. I wouldn't say there was as much angst as you think there is but overall it showed and interesting side. Well done ;D

Jems :)

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