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PostPosted: Sat May 01, 2010 4:20 pm 
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Loved the ending and feel very vindicated that the shrink was in on it. I knew I didn't like him. The fact that the voices in his head were actually real was a surprise, but I loved the twist. Am I the only one imagining the next time one of them is kidnapped, Gibbs going over every inch of them with a fine tooth comb and a magnifying glass?

All in all, well done. Mad will love it, I'm sure.

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PostPosted: Sat May 01, 2010 4:53 pm 
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Heh! Gibbs can always say he's checking them for ticks. ;D

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Bravo! I loved it! ...and I'm with Carolyn that the voices being real was an excellent twist to the story.

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PostPosted: Sat May 01, 2010 6:04 pm 
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Well, making the voices real was the only way I could keep it from being AU...and still having Gibbs go along with it all, as opposed to having Tim's sanity checked. :)

Glad you liked it! :D

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PostPosted: Sat May 01, 2010 6:32 pm 
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Ha! I knew the shrink was evil! And go Tim for being heroic and chucking the bomb in the dumpster. ;D Though right at the beginning when Ziva and Tony were walking down the hallway my brain was like "Eh? Are they in some kind of strange afterlife?" :inquisitive: Though I like the twist too, very neat. That'd be a big relief to know you're not crazy.

Favourite line : “He was a bad, bad semi-precious gemstone." Ah, Tony. ;D

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**NEW STORY: INCENDIARY**
With the team in hospital and another missing without a trace,
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Thanks! I admit that I modeled the last chapter a bit after some stories in which the team arrives to arrest the perp...and then you're told how they survived. I hope it worked. :)

I liked that line, too. I like writing Tony's dialogue; he has a funny way of saying things that no one else can bring themself ro say. ;D

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Really enjoyed this story, Pam.

The voice being real...great! (Hmmm...mind if I use that?)

Always good when Tim is being heroic and Gibbs brings him back down to earth a bit...but still with some pride for his actions.

Very enjoyable read.

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PostPosted: Sun May 02, 2010 3:47 am 
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Well, despite my seemingly invisible, definitely unanswered, and subsequently deleted comment on Chapter 4, I’m going to risk butting into this thread again to leave a quick comment.

I have loved Countdown from start to finish...and I want to thank you for all your hard work and creativity, and for producing such a wonderful, suspenseful story. Thank you! :clap: :clap:

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PostPosted: Sun May 02, 2010 6:47 am 
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I never saw your chapter 4 comment, Mad. I know this, because I was looking for one. I must have missed it, and for that I am sorry. I certainly did not intend to appear that I was ignoring you. Please don't assume that I was.

I was also home from work, sick, on Thursday and Friday, and online only irregularly, so you may have had your comment up only during a time when I was not online to see it.

But I'm glad you liked the story.

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PostPosted: Sun May 02, 2010 7:06 am 
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Thanks, Marysia! I admit I've done the Gibbs-brings-Tim-to-reality-and-does-the0don't-do-that-again thing a couple of times...but I like it. ;D Sometimes Gibbs will catch his people doing rash things; other times he won't hear about it. But I'm a big believer in actions having consequences, and this includes hesitations, omissions, and risk-taking. :)

You can use the "voice being real" if you like. :)

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PostPosted: Sun May 02, 2010 7:10 am 
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Just coming back to say that everytime I saw this being updated I had The Final Countdown by Europe in my head. Hee. ;D

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PostPosted: Sun May 02, 2010 7:23 am 
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I may make that the theme song of this fic. ;D

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Hi! This was a wonderful story. I have to admit that I was a little suspicious of the doctor at first (because of his unique name), but I absolutely did not foresee his involvement with Tim's abduction and subsequent travails.

That is one aspect of this story that I greatly appreciated: that nothing could be anticipated, that nothing was formulaic. One line that got to me in the first chapter was when he escaped into the lavatory where ...he threw what he wished was cold, but actually was lukewarm, tap water on his face. How often in stories do we see folks going for, and getting, cold water from the faucet?

In light of this nothing-is-as-expected vibe, I guess it shouldn't have been a surprise that the ending, too, could not have been anticipated...or that Tim would have had issues with a stuck window. I'm glad the team survived. :D The idea of an implanted transmitter was brilliant! I am sort of curious, though. Just how did the messages get transmitted during Turquois' session with Tim?

Very nicely done! I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you for writing and sharing this, as well as offering your services during the Haiti auction. And thank you, Mad, for having sponsored this story.

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PostPosted: Sun May 02, 2010 8:33 am 
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Er....how did the messages get transmitted during Tim's time with Turkoyse? Er, uh, that's technically called an "oopsie." :blush: Maybe Gomez took over the transmissions at the time? Actually, if I were to change the story (as I sometimes tidy it up before posting on ff.net), I would probably say that Tim had a few echoes or memories of voices. Thanks for catching the continuity error! :)

The water temperature thing comes from my building. In shows like NCIS, water in the bathrooms is always cold when they need cold or hot when they need hot. In my office building, which switched to motion-detecting faucets years ago (and no opportunity to adjust the temperature), the water temp is an inoffensive lukewarm almost all the time now, although sometimes we're surprised with really cold or verging-on-hot.

I have a stable of counselors for use in fics, all with curious names. In addition to Turkoyse, there are Dr. Bhutterflye, Dr. Peony...I have them written down somewhere.

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PostPosted: Sun May 02, 2010 4:44 pm 
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I have already apologised to Pam via PM regarding my petulant outburst, but as the petulance was out here in the public domain, I got to thinking that it was only right and proper that the apology was also in public. So Pam, I hope you will accept my public apology for being such a grade one whiner; you are so busy on here and have not been well...I should have been more patient and let you catch up on posts...

Thanks you again for writing such a wonderful story!

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PostPosted: Sun May 02, 2010 4:57 pm 
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Thank you, Mad. I'm glad at least that you liked the story.

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