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PostPosted: Sun Jun 26, 2016 7:20 pm 
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This will have 12-15 chapters, so all comments, questions and rotten tomatoes go here. :)

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 27, 2016 10:16 am 
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(I'm sorry, I couldn't resist. I will try to read properly at some point!)

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PostPosted: Tue Jun 28, 2016 12:28 pm 
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:D Yeah, I'm having to wait to read all the WEE stories until I finish writing this one.

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PostPosted: Thu Jun 30, 2016 10:09 pm 
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Just finished chapter one. Looks like you have a good case file going on. Hopefully I can find some more time tonight and read the rest of what you've written so far.

And let me just say that your writing is amazing. I really need to go check out more of your stories... I feel like I've really missed out on something special by having not read them until now.

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 01, 2016 1:20 pm 
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Thanks! Just posted Chapter 4, and Chapter 5 is coming later today.

Awww... Thanks! Perk of being a RL editor and former reporter is I get a lot of practice with words. :) Most of my other stories are McNozzo, but my WEE from two years ago, House of Cards, is another casefile with no pairings.

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Unexpected, and an interesting premise. I like it ;D

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 01, 2016 2:46 pm 
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Well, Barb wanted something out of the box. :evillaugh: :evillaugh:

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 01, 2016 2:48 pm 
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I don't mind McNozzo, so I'll check them out. I'll read pretty much anything as long as it's written well. ;)

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 01, 2016 2:53 pm 
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I couldn't remember. :) I tend to assume people who haven't run across my stories yet aren't McNozzo fans because the Breathe series stories still get a lot of traffic even though I wrote them six or seven years ago.

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 01, 2016 4:48 pm 
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And Chapter 5 is now up!

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PostPosted: Sun Jul 03, 2016 2:27 pm 
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I'm just getting around to chapter two and it's fantastic! You had some really great humor in there. I loved especially loved this part:

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“The moon does not shine during the day,” Ziva said, a wrinkle appearing across her forehead.

Luke wasn’t sure what to say to that, but nobody else seemed surprised.

“Moonshine’s illegal liquor,” McGee said. “It’s… an acquired taste. But good, once you get used to it.”

“McGee?” Gibbs asked.

“Abby has a friend, Boss,” he said.

“Of course she does, McRumRunner,” DiNozzo said. “I’m still surprised you tried it.”

“Abby can be persuasive, Tony,” McGee said.

“How does rum run?” Ziva asked.
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 03, 2016 2:30 pm 
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I had fun with that exchange. Also, there's another one I snickered while I wrote in Chapter 4. :evillaugh: :evillaugh:

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 04, 2016 11:41 am 
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....aaaaaand it took me this long to figure out these are Dukes of Hazzard characters. :rolleyes: Well, it took me until you mentioned Daisy in chapter 3.

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 04, 2016 11:47 am 
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LOL!!! To be fair, if you haven't seen the reunion movies, the wildland firefighter career path for Luke is unexpected. :)

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 04, 2016 11:54 am 
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I haven't seen Dukes of Hazzard since, who knows... early 90s? My dad and I would watch re-runs together when I was younger. :)

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Just finished chapter one! You wrote a Dukes story! :lol2: :lol2: I grew up on this show. I've met both John Schneider and Tom Wopat. Love the Dukes.

This is gonna be great!

Can't wait for more.

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 04, 2016 12:04 pm 
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Just finished chapter two.

Nice job with the set up. I like the way you write Luke.

You have my attention, for sure! :bounce: :bounce:

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 04, 2016 1:25 pm 
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Oh, good - I was hoping you'd like the Dukes, but I didn't want to give the surprise away by asking. :)

I met Tom Wopat when I went to one of his concerts last year, but I haven't met John Schneider. Their Christmas album together is hysterical - they included a lot of bantering snippets.

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 04, 2016 10:10 pm 
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I'm absolutely loving the story. I'm on chapter 8.

You have such a great handle on everyone. I love that you tweak the language with the narration when Bo or Luke is the central figure, making the grammar off. I'm from Eastern Kentucky, and I know people who talk that way. It feels genuine. :yes:

Great job with the set up of the story! It feels like it could be an episode. The pacing is great, and you're using every team member well. I LOVE that you're setting up the Gabby undercover. Can't wait to see that play out.

Election polls! Yikes!! :shocked:

Off to read some more.

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 04, 2016 10:26 pm 
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Yay! I'm so glad you're enjoying it! I didn't get as much Gabby as I would like, as pretty much the whole rest of the story was written this weekend and resolving the case took priority. But there's about 24 unaccounted-for hours in there and I'll let you imagine that. Or maybe I'll write that as a episode tag of sorts when I have more re time... Hmmmmm.

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 04, 2016 10:31 pm 
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I totally understand about the timing! It's terrific. It definitely doesn't feel like you had to rush, if that counts for anything.

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 05, 2016 8:19 am 
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Oh, good! I'm glad you're enjoying it, and that my lack of writing time doesn't come across. (Some credit goes to my friend who betaed — she sent me back a couple of times when I tried to rush through some of the solving of the case late in the story. ;) )

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I finished reading this a few days ago, but failed to comment. This was a fun, well-paced, exceptionally-written story. I wasn't kidding earlier when I said I will have to check out the rest of your stories. You're brilliant. :clap:

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 27, 2016 5:09 pm 
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I hope you enjoy some of the other stories I've written.

RL has been insane, so today's the first day I've been on the boards in about six weeks — sorry it took so long to respond. :(

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PostPosted: Sun Dec 18, 2016 3:25 pm 
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I just realized I never did come in and comment on the conclusion of this story!! :shocked:

I really loved it. Thank you so much for such a fantastic gift.

I will give you a more detailed review/feedback/squeefest whenever I can eventually get my head above water. I have been so ridiculously busy this year. I'm hoping to make more time for NFA next year.

I signed up for SeSa, then freaked out thinking I wouldn't have time to write. That's when I realized I hadn't yet commented on the end of THIS story, which is not cool. I'm sorry I've made you wait so long!

I did read it and love it. I'll be back later. :yes:

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